11. Rough Cut

Rough Cut



Things I need to change for the final film:

  • A few more establishing shots of the different locations
  • Generally more long shots (I feel as though the whole film is too close to the camera all the time)
  • The window shot needs to be re-filmed as my finger is in it
  • Wider shots of the two characters as they wake up to distinguish between the different locations
  • Re-film rich looking through his wallet
  • Long shot of the poor man getting ready (to show off the setting more)
  • Re-film the close up of the poor man getting ready so he is more central
  • Fridge scene needs to be more obvious that the juice is empty and how he is annoyed to have to be drinking water
  • Poor man needs to enjoy the water more
  • A Better transition from the poor man drinking to counting the money
  • Need to film the ending at the shop to round it all off

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